I really do love it. Very creative and original. I love how Edward and Mel are in a relationship and I hope you go into more depths in the next chapters. I wonder if you have a back story for all of them and how they met. Some readers wonder what are the character's motivation is and why they do what they do. The ending is pretty mysterious and that is a good way to make people keep reading. Watch your words. I saw a 'two' were a 'too' should be. Other than that I don't see anymore word problems but you should recheck though. The story is amazing and I can't wait to read the others