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I know life isn't fair
I know I deserve better
But the truth is I don't care
I'm just one man, despite it all
They will always mean more than I
So what if I'm alone
So what if I'm depressed
So what if I'm hopelessly trapped
In a need for consistency
At least they are fine
That's always been enough for me
Now you come to me, and that say that isn't fair
You tell them I deserve better
I know I shouldn't care but I know you are right
You see through me, now so do they
How can you understand, it's too late for me
So what if I'm alone
So what if I'm depressed
So what if I'm hopelessly trapped
In a need for consistency
At least they are fine
That's always been enough for me
Not everyone gets a happily ever after
We don't all fall in love
And sometimes we loved and lost
I can take all the pain that they wish onto you
But heartbreak is a killer, when like me you have two
I know I deserve better
But the truth is I don't care
I'm just one man, despite it all
They will always mean more than I
So what if I'm alone
So what if I'm depressed
So what if I'm hopelessly trapped
In a need for consistency
At least they are fine
That's always been enough for me
Now you come to me, and that say that isn't fair
You tell them I deserve better
I know I shouldn't care but I know you are right
You see through me, now so do they
How can you understand, it's too late for me
So what if I'm alone
So what if I'm depressed
So what if I'm hopelessly trapped
In a need for consistency
At least they are fine
That's always been enough for me
Not everyone gets a happily ever after
We don't all fall in love
And sometimes we loved and lost
I can take all the pain that they wish onto you
But heartbreak is a killer, when like me you have two
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Psychic is omnicaring and honestly believes everyone else in the universe means more than his own existence...but someone else disagrees and now his whole team do
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Overall Vision
Originality Technique ImpactTechnique: The repetition of specific verse was nice, and does well to maintain the theme and call the readers' attention back home.
Originality: I've seen a lot of transgressive writings on the verge of depressing, but I can forgive this cliche in your way of well-doing the piece.
Impact: I'm afraid I had to work to anchor this up a bit, but for personal reasons. I admit that I'm not a very emotional person, making it hard for anything to bear genuine meaning to me. I'm sorry, I feel this aspect of my critique is biased outside your favor ^^'
Overall, good show on this piece <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/c/c…" width="20" height="20" alt="
" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="60" title="Clap"/> A quick read, but meaningful from beginning to end. It reveals a lot about the character, letting for an easy look into his POV without rambling on and on. In short; laconic of the character's being. It's worth noting that a lot of us can relate to the theme, so it goes deeper than just Psychic. It's relative to us all, easily enjoyable without knowing the character.